INT. - LIVING ROOM - AFTERNOON
DREW and JULIE are watching Battlestar Galactica on the
television using Netflix. The show is ending and Drew
reaches for the remote.
DREW
What do you want to watch next?
JULIE
Uhmm, you choose.
MARK enters the room.
MARK
What are you guys watching?
DREW
We were just watching some
Battlestar Galactia. Now we're
just browsing.
MARK pulls out his smartphone and shows DREW.
MARK
Check this out.
DREW and JULIE look at MARK's phone. MARK shows them an
application on his phone. The TITLE reads "Netflix
Shuffler".
MARK (CONT'D)
I present, the Netflix Shuffler!
It's perfect for when you don't
know what you want to watch on
Netflix.
DREW
How does it work?
MARK logs into his Netflix account on their television. He
proceeds to show them the program.
MARK
Netflix already knows your favorite
shows and movies. So Netflix
Shuffler uses that info to
automatically play shows for you.
JULIE
Doesn't Netflix automatically play
another episode already?
MARK
Yeah, another episode of the SAME
show. This allows you to watch a
new episode of a different show
automatically.
DREW
So it's like an auto-pilot for
Netflix!
MARK
Exactly!
JULIE
That sounds great, how do we sign
up?
MARK
Super easy, just go to your Netflix
account and sign up.
MUSIC FADE UP.
INT. - LIVING ROOM - NIGHT
DREW and JULIE sit down on the couch and DREW signs up for
Netflix Shuffler. MARK sits down with a bowl of popcorn and
they start watching an episode.
FADE TO BLACK.
Sunday, July 28, 2013
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I like your script. It's conversational. It touches on the points without getting overly technical.
ReplyDeleteA few pointers:
Like I told flyaway1999, don't say, "it's easy" or "super easy." If something is easy, then they will find out that it is. If you have to say it's easy, it usually isn't. Like, "trust me." That's the first indication you shouldn't.
Also, Mark sounds out character when he says "I present, the Netflix Shuffler..." That whole line should be condensced down to something along the lines of, "It's the Netflix Shuffler." Then Drew can ask how it works. Makes it less folksy and more conversational.
Last, for the last scene, You don't need to show them signing up for the service. It's implied they signed up when Mark showed them. Just have them sit down and watch the program.
Thanks. I definitely have too much clutter in this and I'll clean it up for the revised version.
ReplyDeleteThanks. I definitely have too much clutter in this and I'll clean it up for the revised version.
ReplyDeleteHi, I like your script. It's conversational. But I got lost when Mark showed the app on his smartphone. Then he logged into the account on the television. I'm confused as to how it's all suppose to work. What's the purpose of the app?
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